Seven Deadly Sins Take 1

The Seven Deadly Sins Paper was based off of the paper "All Seven Deadly Sins Committed at Church Bake Sale." After reading that essay I thought that this would be a pretty interesting paper to write, but I didn't know what to write about.  It took me a little bit of thinking of what topic I could write about before I came up with the Basketball games.  After that all the ideas of the different people that could be committing the sins just flowed.

When drafting my first draft of my Seven Deadly Sins paper, I thought that it would be a pretty easy paper for me to write, which turned out to be true.  At first I had to do a little bit of research in order to start writing but after that the words just flowed.  I think that the paper was so easy to write because it was a topic that was interesting to me.  Watching those basketball games is something that i enjoy to do.  My family and I watch the Syracuse games whenever they are on TV.  I have learned to know the players on the team and their strengths.

While writing this paper I learned that an exemplification paper is one that uses examples to get the main idea across.  In my essays I used different people who were committing the sins at the games as an example.  Most of my examples were related to a group of people like most of the fans or the players or the coaches.  it wasn't just about one person.  My "thesis" for this exemplification paper was "At a basketball game of this level and excitement, people are bound to sin at some point during the duration of the game."  Each Exemplification paper should have a thesis with examples to back it up.

With my paper, I felt I did a pretty good job.  I think that some parts of the paper could be stronger, but the examples that i added were pretty good.  I had one example for each of the seven sins.  I think that the parts of my paper that were the strongest were the parts where i gave a little bit of history about the two teams playing each other and also some of the examples about some of the fans.  The history I put about their past was "In 2009 the two teams shared a six over time game for the finals!"  With this it shows how both of the two teams are so strong and they are a good match.  It shows how intense the two teams can be.

The parts that I feel that I feel I can make stronger are my introduction and my conclusion.  I think that i just wrote both of them with out putting a lot of thought into either one of them.  My introduction isn't that bad because I added a little bit of the history between the two teams.  But with the conclusion I feel that I just summed all of it up and then was done.  I could have ended it a little bit cleaner.

I know feel that I need to work on adding a couple more examples of some of the different sins.  I also thing I can add a little bit of detail about the statistics of the coaches and the players, especially about how the two coaches are extremely well known in college basketball.  Along with that I think that I can add a little bit of detail into each of the different sins.

All Seven Deadly Sins Committed at a Syracuse vs. Uconn Basketball game

            Syracuse and Uconn are one of the biggest rivals in college basketball today.  The Syracuse-Uconn games are the most exciting games for mort of the Syracuse fans. Fans get to experience a game this exciting only two or three times a year.  In 2009 the two teams shared a six over time game for the finals!  Nothing gets more exciting then that. With these games, the fans go crazy, and the coaches and players go insane.  It is the perfect place for all seven deadly sins.

            All the fans start rushing into the Carrier Dome way before the game even starts getting all their souvenirs and beers before they take their seats.  No one wants to get up and miss any part of the game.  It’s quite funny watching some people walk in with piles and piles of food and cups and cups of beer they already bought.  How can someone eat that much during a two hour period?  How can you not get sick after all of that food?

            Once the game finally gets started and all of the plays get onto the court the sins continue to grow.  The players start running back and fourth.  They can hear the fans in the stands yelling and cheering.  It gets them pumped up and ready to play their hearts out!  Those first year players get ready to show what they are made of.  Prove that they can be a part of their team.  Fab Melo and C.J Fair have proven what they can do, but can they continue to do it.  Scoop Jading, Kris Joseph, and Brandon Triche come back to show they still have it! You can tell that they all have worked their buts off for this game.

            Each team continues to score one by one through the first half of the game.  Jim Boeheim keeps switching all of his players because his team is just that good.  Five new players go in at a time.  Every time you hear the crowd cheer that they get to see someone else.  You can see and read the faces of each guy in the crowed.  The lust, the envy, and the gluttony is written all over it.  A guy carefully puts his ticket on a bag that is full of every other game ticket.  Hundreds filled that bag and they were all Syracuse.  He has a Syracuse hat, a Syracuse sweatshirt, Syracuse pants, and even Syracuse shoes.  You can tell who his favorite team is.  The team that he loves, that he lusts.

            One guy is on the bleachers cheering every time Syracuse makes a basket.  You could tell that he used to play basket ball.  He was tall and slim, just like the guys out on the court.  His face just read that he wanted to be down on the court running with the guys and playing.  He looked like he was meant to be down there.  He envied all of the Syracuse and Uconn players.  That fan would have done anything to trade places with someone like Kris Joseph.

            A group of guys sat in their chairs still stuffing their faces from the beginning of the day.  It was as if they just came to the game to eat all the different kinds of food.  They had nachos, a hot dog, a pretzel and ice cream.  Not to mention all the empty cups that was all around them

            The game started coming to an end.  There was only 4 minutes left and the score was close.  The refs started calling everything.  Players were sitting down because of their four of five fowls.  Coach Boeheim and Coach Calhoun started jumping out of their seats yelling at the refs.  The players started getting more intense.  The wrath between the two teams filled the whole stadium.  It was too close to know what would win.  In the last two minutes, Syracuse started pulling away.  You could tell that the rest of the Uconn players that didn’t have to sit out yet weren’t as prepared for a game like this.  They didn’t work as hard in practices Syracuse, or even their top players.  They just looked like they were lazy.

            Syracuse us up by 5 with a minute left.  Each basket they made was an excitement and a party.  They were getting way too cocky and excited.  The pride they shared was at the wrong time.  This game was not over yet.  Uconn could still make a come back.  They still had a chance of winning.  With thirty seconds left Uconn was only down by two.  Uconn could win if Syracuse doesn’t make one final move.

            Syracuse ended up winning by 8 points.  The players couldn’t have been more ecstatic, but Boeheim and the other coaches were a little greedy.  They thought that they could have played better and won by a little more.  Syracuse could have won by at least 12 points that nice.  They started this 2010-2011 season winning their first four games.

            This game was full of sins.  The lust, envy, and gluttony of the fans.  The Sloth, wrath, and pride of the players.  The greed and wrath of the Coaches.  Each game comes with new fans and teams, but all the same sins. All seven sins are committed at a basketball game.